Peer Blog Review 4

This week I on commented on Felicity’s creative blog post influenced by the Appin Massacre.

https://felicitymcmanus.wordpress.com/2016/05/06/6th-blog/

“Hi Felicity,
An interesting creative response to the Appin Massacre, I think the perspective of narration you have taken was very clever. Perhaps you could further develop a sense of the cultural climate of 1816. It is possible that this response in the white community during that time would have felt very conflicting to the protagonist. A development of character would be very interesting.
Also, be mindful of your use of language for example ‘feel a strange feeling inside’ is repetitive. There were a few sentences that could be further refined.
Overall, well done!”

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