Peer Review 2

https://briannamwblog.wordpress.com/2016/08/30/moments-before-skydiving/

Hi Bri!
Very well written blog post and what a great experience! I love the build up of tension you create in this story, it really lends to the sense of adventure and fear. Some sentences feel a little clunky with adjectives. Being an adjective fiend myself, I definitely find that having someone else cull a few things here and there helps. I can never part with them.

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