Peer Review 4

Hi Audrey,
Well done on your blog post, I agree with your opinion that May Wedderburn understood the nature of war and felt deeply passionate about expressing her experiences. Some of your sentence structures need revising as your language feels inconsistent. You give us information but I’d love to know more about the context, for example, an explanation of ‘VADS’ why were they important and how did they impact this statement? Working on the flow of your sentences and tying in each paragraph with the previous would be beneficial to you writing.


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