Peer Review 8

Hi Eleanor,
You have created a truly comprehensive digital kit! In future, however, you might be more conscious of the way you assemble this information. Perhaps including some imagery, or even inserting embedded videos into your post rather than links could create a more interactive kit for the lazy researcher (such as myself).


Peer Review 7

Hi Tamara!
A wonderful example of political rhetoric defending the indefensible. I found your perspective on how the Australian government manipulating current fears very interesting. It seems to be the ‘hot trend’ to use such language as ‘illegal immigrants’ to stereotype those who seek asylum. I think the media has a lot to answer for in this regard, it makes you question why they are pushing this agenda.
Well done!

Peer Review 6

Hi Arthur,
A beautifully expressed argument you make here. I agree that there ‘needs to be a balance’. However, do you not think Baumer was being hypercritical? I support almost all of your statements but as humans shouldn’t we be mindful of the individual? Baumer gave a very direct opinion of the people he comes across but gives no mind to circumstance and individual preference. I think we should be wary of sweeping generalizations.

Peer Review 4

Hi Audrey,
Well done on your blog post, I agree with your opinion that May Wedderburn understood the nature of war and felt deeply passionate about expressing her experiences. Some of your sentence structures need revising as your language feels inconsistent. You give us information but I’d love to know more about the context, for example, an explanation of ‘VADS’ why were they important and how did they impact this statement? Working on the flow of your sentences and tying in each paragraph with the previous would be beneficial to you writing.

Peer Review 3

Hi Riley!
Thankyou for your honesty and self-expression in this post. The way you consider how grief may change under different circumstances such as ‘The constant threat of death’ is particularly interesting. I don’t believe we would react to death in the same way we do now, compared to Pauls experience. When death is your entire reality, grief becomes complicated.
A great post with just a small attention to detail required (some words accidently missing which affect the flow of reading)

Peer Review 2

Hi Bri!
Very well written blog post and what a great experience! I love the build up of tension you create in this story, it really lends to the sense of adventure and fear. Some sentences feel a little clunky with adjectives. Being an adjective fiend myself, I definitely find that having someone else cull a few things here and there helps. I can never part with them.

Peer Review 1

Hi Ronny,
I agree with your comments discussing the personal impact “On Passing the New Menin Gate” had on your own perspective. Perhaps you could discuss in further how Sassoon demonstrates the hypocrisy of war?
I believe this poem stands up against the idealist perception of war, I don’t necessarily agree that the quote “Who shall absolve the foulness of their fate.- Those doomed, conscripted, unvictorious ones?” directly speaks of standing up for their beliefs as you stated. Perhaps you can further consider how this idea might be supported.
All over, a good response but be careful of spelling mistakes and grammatical errors (Perhaps consider changing “as seen your quote” to “as read in your quote?”)

Well done,